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Honeymoon Horror
Author: Jon Maddux
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(Added on Feb 24, 2007)
(This month 13371 readers) (Total 30760 readers) |
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A beautiful bride is ravaged on what should have been the most wonderful day of her life. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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Rating: (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
ThisGirl
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Mar 2, 2007 |
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Very fast-paced and short, the tale reads more like an anecdote than a full story. The author does a good job of wrapping it up cleanly (so to speak).
I would have rated higher, however, it had the feeling of being very rushed because of some technical and possibly typing errors.
(7/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Mar 3, 2007)
- thank you! i try to answer as many comments as i can and i miss a few sometimes but thanks for taking time to leave something. If you have any specific areas i need to work on let me know. I am always looking for ways to improve my writings.
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| Reviewer:
JonMaddux
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Feb 27, 2007 |
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WooooooooooooHooooooooooo!! Loved it the best story i have ever read!! LOL
if you hadnt guessed already i posted the review as a spoof because no one else at the time had posted anything. it moved it to the top after i added the explanation. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Feb 26, 2007 |
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More entertaining than the usual story. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Feb 26, 2007 |
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Good realistic premise, As chksng19 says ripped from the headlines. Characters had some believable emotions but the dialog could be a little smoother. You're getting better but really please don't review yourself unless you have a split personality.(It only encourages the carrion feeders) (8/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Feb 27, 2007)
- thank you, as for my own review(s) i posted it after hundreds of people had read but not rated it. I figured if they saw the rating they might take the time to pipe up and toss in something more. I honestly hadnt thought anything of it until you said something. I had done it for some of my other stories also just to break the ice after getting no votes or feedbacks, kind of looked at it like a politician who votes for themselves. More of a oversight on my part, my appologies to those put off by that. Thanks to all those who actually give me some feedback i can use and learn from i do appreciate it!
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| Reviewer:
Rhabbi
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Feb 26, 2007 |
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Excellant. I am so tired of those rape stories where the woman ends up a willing accomplice. thank you for the great story. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Mar 3, 2007)
- that definitely makes two of us!! So many times a really awesome storyline or superb effort by an author is ruined as soon as i read a blurb about how suddenly into she is. No woman whos being molested or raped and is worried about being possibly killed, infected with HIV or who knows what, and worst of all impregnated is going to be thrilled and so turned on they cant contain themselves. Its a traumatic experience, i try to capture that.
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chksng19
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Feb 26, 2007 |
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An unusual premise, "ripped from the headlines" as they say. Some strange word choices, and kinda choppy. Absolutely bad form to rate your own, you know. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Feb 27, 2007)
- thank you for your feedback. I am trying to improve on my stories as people like yourself give me the quality feedback i can use. As for the vote i posted it more as a spoof i suppose. I figured if people saw it they would either agree or disagree but would atleast post some form of feedback. I hadnt posted it until over like 1500 people had read the story and said nothing. As i mentioned to the other guy who called me on it, it was in hindsight bad form you are correct. that whole hindsight and 20/20 thing. I do try to come up with new and exciting plots as i am sure most readers like me get tired of reading the same plots recycled over and over by various authors. Maybe some day my writing will catch up with my imagination and my end product will be as good as my plotlines. I shall continue to improve. Thanks to those of you who give me quality advice i can use.
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 25, 2007 |
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Well, you can't write and you can't review, so I suppose that makes you a double threat. Unrealistic, simplistic, wooden. I would say that you could do better than this, but I doubt it. Better luck in your next career. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
JonMaddux
(Edit) (Feb 27, 2007)
- gee really narrowed down what exactly you found wrong with the story. Its asshats like you that really piss me off. If your going to criticize my work atleast give me enough information to fix the errors or perceived errors on my next stories. If all you want to do is piss and moan why even bother. Your feedback gave me NO clue as to what is supposed to be wrong with the story or how to fix it. Perhaps you should volunteer your time to proof a few stories? I am sure you wont and if you did you would half ass that like you did my critique. thanks for nothing.
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