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The Greenwich Tales
Author: Freddie Clegg
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(Added on Apr 6, 2007)
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A slave owner sets out to change her life. Daphne, from Market Forces, meets up with some old friends and new to help. (Co-authored with Phil Lane) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 20, 2012 |
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"Boring" is the last thing I'd call any Freddie Clegg story -with or without Phil Lane.
If anything, I've mentally added Freddie to my bunch of "very good authors" because the man knows how to bring a story. His tales have wit, humor, erotics and the occasional slip -and that's why he is anything but boring. Because, whatever happens -even when there's little to no sex- Freddie Clegg keeps you entertained.
I could imagine people calling this boring, but then that would be the ones which actually don't like to read.
I do like to read, especially from an author who knows how to write.
Thanks a lot, Freddie. Give my regards to Phil, please.
JJ (10/10)
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- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jan 21, 2012)
- Well, thanks, Jimmy. I like to try to mix up the content a bit and certainly I hope that its never boring - although of course that always depends on the reader's expectations.
I'll certainly pass on your regards to Phil. This was the first tale we worked on together and the collaboration still continues with the sequel to Thesis, Such Sweet Sorrow and Tales from Far Country now under way.
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| Reviewer:
Ilfyr
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May 16, 2007 |
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Quite good, but a little bit of a 'flow' disconnection with some of the story. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (May 17, 2007)
- I think I understand what you are getting at. It was quite hard writing the tale using the structure of a series of separate chunks from different people's perspective - especially as they didn't all work out at similar lengths.
Thanks for your feed-back.
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| Reviewer:
castle2001
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Apr 9, 2007 |
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I have read the Clegg story.
eventuelly it developed too many actors to keep track of with only one hand. Daphne is making progress. In a few more chapters she'll realize her true self and be one of the firms girls. While not Dostiefsky the characters are going fine for a BDSM tale. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Apr 10, 2007)
- Thanks for this, castle2001. Yes, the number of characters was a problem in Market Forces - there's far fewer this time. I hope you'll enjoy future parts.
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| Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Apr 8, 2007 |
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A bit boring. I haven't read the story this is a spinoff from (and now I probably won't) so I don't know the theory behind the conditioning of the slaves but the reaction of Brance seems just wrong and unrealistic to me. Not once does she try to fight back. And at the beginning just after she was abducted she stills seems to trust her abductors. Just seems ridiculous to me. And I don't believe that you can condition anyone so completly that she will never try to run away and go to the cops.
There's almost no sex here (and what little there is is described so clinically that it turns me off).
One redeeming quality of the story, at least the grammar and spelling are OK. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Apr 8, 2007)
- Thanks for the review and I'm sorry the story didn't bring you in. It shouldn't have needed you to have read the other story, so maybe Phil & I took a bit too much for granted. Branca's abduction was intended to be told from her perspective after she has been conditioned and so her responses are flattened but I guess we over did that from your viewpoint.
There is some more coming and we'd be interested to hear if you still feel the same at the end. Whichever way thought out crticisms are allways welcomed. Thanks again.
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azrlg17
(Edit) (Jul 3, 2007)
- I now read the rest and it has some pretty interesting twists. But I found Katya's reaction completely unbelievable. Not only has she no wish to get revenge on someone she trusted who betrayed her and had her abducted, beaten, raped, enslaved and brainwashed but she also has almost no sense of self preservation. How else could you explain that she trusts Daphne who already had her abducted once not to do it again. That she thinks by just saying "leave us alone" a group of hardened criminals and white slavers would actually leave her free when she is a clear and present danger to them. This is the 2nd time in the story someone reacts unexplainably like this. The 1st time with Branca's trust of her abductors it was a minor plot detail that couldn't change the outcome. Here it was a huge endresult-altering development. Any normal person would have gone to the cops to be safe. The slavers could have tried to stop her or they would have had to kill/abduct Daphne and Branca. Or they would have gotten caught.
Also, she is described as someone who abhors slavery yet she doesn't do anything about the group of slavers. Not to make sure that they don't do this to anyone else. Not even to make sure the group can't take her back anymore? Even after Connie tries to get her back?
Sorry but that's just wrong.
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