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My owned slave
Author: Memento
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(Added on Jun 28, 2007)
(This month 21235 readers) (Total 42486 readers) |
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As I promised it’s about time to share some of my online slaves’ ordeals. This one is the ongoing education of a stubborn, sly and smart-assed slave. To some of you the name may sound familiar, since she also published a couple of stories here before becoming my slave. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 22, 2009 |
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Who cares about typos. As long as it doesn't read "xwfgbl" when it should be "hello", I'm fine.
On to the review. I must say I liked Memento's entries thus far. Though maybe not such a skilled writer, he knows how to bring his subjects.
Here however, I have a slight problem with the constant switching between the various formats: that of letters, emails and the actual narrative. It gets on my nerves as it makes me lose focus at times. If the latter is due to me having a severe case of the flu (and having a nice fever) or not, I don't know. I'll re-read the lot when cured.
With the content, I have no problem at all. Although many of the tasks Rowena has to perform have been elaborately described and used in other stories, the latter doesn't take anything away from the appeal.
The fact that everything 'sticks' as a whole still makes me reach for a nice eight.
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 22, 2009 |
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nice job (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jun 30, 2007 |
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While I found the letters/emails back and forth an interesting concept for a story, you had way too many typos for a higher score. Also, they way you changed font size was annoying to me as a reader. Perhaps if you just italicized one person or gave them different fonts it would be easier to read. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
GwaiLo
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Jun 29, 2007 |
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I really enjoyed it. There's some great tasks you set in there, sounds like you're having a lot of fun.
I hope you post more, and it would be great if you could mention where her stories are on the site.
Thanks :) (9/10)
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chromedome11
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Jun 28, 2007 |
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My kind of story. I love a smart ass slut. Keep up the good work -- I'm looking forward to the next installment (9/10)
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