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First Dance
Author: Rhabbi
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(Added on Jul 4, 2007)
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This is a romantic story about a woman giving herself to someone she wants to serve. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Jul 7, 2007 |
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I was a bit torn on this number rating. Did it deserve an 8 or a 9? Your writing style needs a bit of polish. Certain passages were a bit halting. There were also a few mistakes that should have been edited out. However, the story was told in a manner that worked very well. Your telling allowed me to feel the moment; visualize it. I could hear much of the music and I knew exactly how he was feeling - how he felt about the woman.
Really, this was quite good. (8/10)
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