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The Meeting
Author: ruthellen
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(Added on Jul 12, 2007)
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Lanie meets a man (Richard)she has been conversing with online. He proceeds to give her her first orgasm but brings it on via pain. She knows this is something she never wants to be without again |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
avidreader
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Jun 24, 2010 |
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other reviewers have no idea what they are talking about, i loved this story and want to see a chapter 2 just as depraved as chapter 1 was please. Skip the character development if you want. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jul 13, 2007 |
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I think your story idea has great potential! But you have tons of typos and your grammar in places leaves a lot to be desired. Take a deep breath and slow down as you type. It is obvious where you are taking this story is exciting to you and I think you are rushing through it. (Something I do all the time when I am writing something I find hot, too.) If the next chapters are cleaner, I will be more than happy to raise your score. (7/10)
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willow
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Jul 13, 2007 |
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This story has so much potential, as do you as a write, but it feels very hurried. Take more time on each scene and explore her feelings more. She goes from meeting a fella from online to being his dirty little whore in a matter of minutes. I would recommend revisiting this story and expanding upon it and i look forward to learning of her time in the cage. =) Good Luck (6/10)
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