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The Humilation of Lisa the Housewife
Author: The Fish
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(Added on Aug 3, 2007)
(This month 35539 readers) (Total 82128 readers) |
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Lisa, a career woman, is the victim of a complicated plot to ruin her perfect suburban life via blackmail and eventual assassination of her character. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Dec 23, 2007 |
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i realy enjoyed the story, i wish you had added a bit more detail and made it a bit longer (7/10)
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TOXIS
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Aug 7, 2007 |
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A very nice start. You might want to find an editor who can help tighten up your work and free you to keep making progress. The important thing is to keep going and drive the story to a strong and satisfying ending. Happy to help if needed. I expect my rating to improve with this great start. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rhabbi
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Aug 6, 2007 |
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As a first effort this is very good. It can use some polishing, but i particularly like the look inside his mind, and the insight into the future he has with her. (7/10)
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masterdw
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Aug 6, 2007 |
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It is not as bad as all that. You should have posted parts one and two together as part one goes nowhere, but you are going in a good direction and have a nice setup. please continue. (7/10)
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chksng19
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Aug 4, 2007 |
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Fish, a suggestion for the future. Your story should be pretty well finished and in full polish mode before submission here. There are lots of places with writing groups to help you with that, and your audience here is not used to having to "help" with their fantasies. If they did that, they'd just write their own! (5/10)
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