|
|
|
|
|
Paine Grove
Author: GroveMaster
|
| |
(Added on Nov 13, 2001)
(This month 35195 readers) (Total 58502 readers) |
| |
A novice Master is introduced to a male dom, fem sub family by his new girlfriend, who becomes his slave. |
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 10 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 0% |
0% |
0% |
10% |
10% |
10% |
10% |
10% |
20% |
30% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
| Average
Rating: (8/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (10/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (4/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
jip
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 26, 2006 |
| |
Not bad, however found it a little exagerated (6/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 20, 2005 |
| |
very inresting story (8/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
shdowrnnr
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Apr 16, 2005 |
| |
Can't wait to read more. (9/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
crickette
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 21, 2003 |
| |
Good start. I am looking forward to part 4 (7/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Jonathan
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 18, 2001 |
| |
Damn, another incomplete story. Why can't anyone finish anything?
I suppose I should give credit for technical competence--mostly correct grammar, spelling, etc. That doesn't make up for being incomplete.
The main problem, however, is that there's no story here. If the women had shown the slightest bit of reluctance, the story would have been both more interesting and more erotic. As it is, the characters are not particularly likeable. The masters are assholes, but, fortunately for them, the slaves are morons. The main character changes from clueless college student to perfect master (asshole) in a matter of seconds, while his girlfriend makes an equally rapid and unbelievable transformation in the opposite direction.
Being a master seems to consist of shouting a lot, while being a slave consists of groveling. It gets old fast.
My theory is that the story is incomplete because it's painted itself into a corner. The submission is already complete. Where do you go from there? (4/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
pwrfl1
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 16, 2001 |
| |
Women who love, want and get off on pain. That's my type of story. This is well writen, very readable and a great story line. I hope the author keeps them coming for a long, long time. (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
uhd
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 15, 2001 |
| |
Very well written without being too wordy. Excellent family lifestyle! I like the setting and the cast and I hope that many more chapters will follow. (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
bubbydog
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 14, 2001 |
| |
Writing style was clear, concise and content was great. I enjoy reading stories with a good story line, written in a readable style, with limited grammatical/spelling errors. This story definitely qualifies on all counts! I hope the author gives us many more chapters/new stories to read. (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
call
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 14, 2001 |
| |
HOT (9/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
hyphen666
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Nov 14, 2001 |
| |
How original can you get! What's new and exciting with this tale of dumb masters and dumber slaves? I really don't care what happens to this cast of clowns. (5/10)
|
|
|
About 