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INCREmental Sexual Violence
Author: Book of Evils
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(Added on Oct 7, 2007)
(This month 33550 readers) (Total 70366 readers) |
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In the end, there was no help for what ailed the family therapist, or her executive daughter. And everything ended with a bang. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
easyrider27
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Oct 21, 2007 |
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Okay, so this has a lot of potential, but it was very anti-climactic. It seems like you got bored at the end and just ended it as efficiently as possible. However, the odds of an adult woman bleeding to death from the forced removal of her genitalia are slim to nil.
As a writer myself (though I've not been published on this website as of yet) I think you could have gotten another chapter or two out of this idea - perhaps snuffing one of the victims and torturing the other for a few days more. A true sadist would have carried on the torture for as long as possible.
However, the writing was clear and the plot was effective. I'll look for more of your writing in the future! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Oct 21, 2007)
- Hello Easyrider (love the handle)
Thanks for taking the time to pass on your comments, and for the rating. I'm sorry you didn't enjoy the story more, but in my own defence, I believe it might help if you went through some of my previous offerings also. This is only the second story where the victim, or victims weren't removed to a private, secure location to be abused at (my) will over a prolonged period of time. While I suspect your observation about removal of female genitalia not being fatal, may be accurate, move on up, and further in (ie botched abortions) and it all becomes eminently lethal. It wasn't that I got bored, it was that I have three additional completed stories to put the final touches to, numbering over 300 pages, so as a writer yourself, you can appreciate the energy and time required to complete such undertakings. It is plenty time consuming and energy sapping, not to say anything about the soul destroying nature of the content.
Anyhow, hope you enjoy some of my past efforts and also those yet to be posted.
Regards
BofE
- Replied by:
Mothbrad
(Edit) (Nov 14, 2007)
- Just had to add that I love the idea of someone complaining about a BofE story not being quite sadistic enough :) Easyrider, where can I read your work?!
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| Reviewer:
subbity
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Oct 11, 2007 |
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The writing was excellent. It made me genuinely fear the protagonist, not so much for the extent of his violence but how realistic his mental processes were. His intelligence, lack of empathy, crude humor, all came together in a very likely character. The female characters were less so, however. This story may be geared more toward readers on the sadistic side of the spectrum, but I found it exciting and enjoyable nonetheless. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2007)
- Hello:
First and foremost, thank you for the excellent rating and positive observations.
I would gladly welcome any advice to make the female characters (always the victim or victims) more believable. Any help you might offer to help me go deeper into their psychological and verbal responses would be greatly appreciated.
Again, thanks for your support.
Regards
BofE
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| Reviewer:
Mothbrad
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Oct 7, 2007 |
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More stomach turning ultra violence from the Evil One. The quality is high, and the outrage level is even higher than usual. The psychological interplay between sadist and victim is exceptional and genuinely draining. Recommended, but don't blame me if you get upset. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Oct 8, 2007)
- Hello Brad.
Thanks for the excellent review. I find that you always offer much more than the usual empty platitudes and include substantial content. As I've said before, 'You get it'.
Regards BofE
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