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Sex Pills
Author: darkheat
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(Added on Dec 1, 2007)
(This month 32807 readers) (Total 73034 readers) |
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Kat humilates the girls from her class with the help of a new drug. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dragon's muse
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Dec 10, 2007 |
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If I could, I would refrain from rating this piece for the simple reason that I was unable to get past the first two paragraphs.
The basic idea might be a sound one, but with no grammar to speak of in the execution of the idea rather makes that moot point.
As another reviewer said, get a proofreader/editor and revise it, and my rating will also be revised. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
hiwiz4u3
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Dec 3, 2007 |
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I thought the story moved well... (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Muddog
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Dec 2, 2007 |
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I thought the story was creative though it is a common theme. There were some issues with the story structure in general but I found myself caught up enough in the story itself that the text structure didn't bother me at all. I'm looking forward to more. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Dec 2, 2007 |
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Okay, here's the deal: A decent enough story line, but you really need to either find an editor/proofreader or learn a bit about basic grammar, like capitalization, punctuation, and sentence structure. The number of run-on sentences with no punctuation make it difficult to read. I'd certainly consider revising my rating if you did the same with your story. It has a lot of promise. (5/10)
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