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Joe Becomes Jessica
Author: Joe Blow
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(Added on Jun 29, 2008)
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On his 18th birthday, Joe looks for hookers and blow, but gets more than he bargained for. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (4/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chuck
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Jul 1, 2008 |
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HUGE IMPROVEMENT over previous attempts. Obviously there was a lot of hard work to improve grammar and spelling that much.
The concept of the story was unique but it left me not liking the main character. Obviously he deserves whatever happens to him. As mentioned in a julietvuk's review, the character accepts his plight way too quickly. Fleshing out the story at the point of his abduction and giving insight to his feelings would help. The changing of the telling to third person was a clever way to show his new perspective, but it came on too quickly and with too little preparation for his new mindset to be convincing.
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| Reviewer:
a.broadsword
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Jul 1, 2008 |
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Interesting concept, does he get castrated, silicon tits the works, the last bit is bizarre, change from 1st to 3rd person, like wants re writing, but I still want to see part 2, perhaps he escapes, as a he, comne on I want to know. (4/10)
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julietvuk
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Jul 1, 2008 |
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Although written in the first person (apart from the very end when it switches to third person), this story lacks any emotion and is very cold. The victim just seems to accept what's happening to him without any real worries. Very unconvincing! (2/10)
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