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Obedient Mommy
Author: Helena Aranatovya
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(Added on Sep 20, 2008)
(This month 30215 readers) (Total 63283 readers) |
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About a spoiled teenage boy who puts his own mom under mind control and turns her into his slave, making her do demeamning things from performing sexual acts on him, to doing disguting things and even pimping her out to the neighbourhood too |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Polecat
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Nov 6, 2008 |
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I concur with ElectricBadger: The plot is good, and you could have elaborated more on some of the parts but mostly the grammar errors are distracting. It is dificult if English is not your first or main language. Maybe you can log into the writers forum and have someone there help you revise the grammar; they are very helpful. Please write more (5/10)
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dennisthmn
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Oct 29, 2008 |
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Very good story when will the next parts to be sent (9/10)
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ElectricBadger
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Oct 4, 2008 |
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A good plot and some nice ideas, but they were passed over too briefly. The grammar and spelling errors were also a problem. Do a bit of revision, lenghten it out and it'll be great! (5/10)
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mkemse
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Sep 25, 2008 |
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the story itself was good my main issue is the is to much open space betwen parts (7/10)
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