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Undercover
Author: J Lewis
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(Added on Nov 5, 2008)
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An undercover female officer decides to take a situation into her own hands with painfull regrets. |
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| Reviewer:
ossa
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Feb 16, 2009 |
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Hope there is more coming. Very well written and gives one the feeling of the humiliation and terror felt by the victim. Is the sister going to get into the action? (10/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 17, 2009 |
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great reading (7/10)
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littleone_
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Dec 7, 2008 |
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Damn, it just didn't end. If a decent ending would show up it would worth a much higher ratting. (5/10)
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CrazedDog
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Nov 29, 2008 |
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Good introduction and start toward the full torture session to follow. Has me looking forward to the next installments.
3&4 have my complete attention. Bring on the next rooms! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
CrazedDog
(Edit) (Jun 3, 2010)
- Was this story ever finished? Been hanging on for a long time.
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| Reviewer:
BDMjane
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Nov 26, 2008 |
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Poor Jessica... Looking forward to read about what will happen to her more. (8/10)
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chimera
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Nov 25, 2008 |
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Love the F/f material. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
oldpervert1
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Nov 10, 2008 |
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pretty good story. looking foreward to jessica being tortured in the next several rooms. try a little bit more to discribe to bondage positions so they can be more visual. (too bad we can't do graphic novels or have an occational pic.) the discription of the straps on jessica in chap2 was very good, but the part where her tits were hung over the bar was hard for me to see. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Gordi
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Nov 10, 2008 |
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Very interesting read and good scenes.
But dude you have to lay off the comma's. Find some way of getting your ideas across without a comma every 5 words. Because if, as I am suggesting, a person were, perhaps, to pause, like this, after each, and possibly every, phrase, you would probably hit them in, you guessed it, the face. (6/10)
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meanness
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Nov 7, 2008 |
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Very nice, I'm looking forward to further chapters. The story flows well, keeping ones interest and not allowing one time to lose it.
Incredibly vivid without going overboard with excess details. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
gman49
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Nov 6, 2008 |
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Really promising start - I look forward to further chapters.
Nice elements of suspense, with the room scenes building a potentially great story line. (9/10)
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