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Left Alone
Author: DarkWatch
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(Added on Mar 5, 2009)
(This month 44397 readers) (Total 52338 readers) |
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I have devilish plans for my wife when I tie her up and leave her alone at home. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 9, 2015 |
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So… in part five Jen transforms into Wendy, and Diana becomes Sue? Why change their names? And what happened with part two? You dropped an entirely different story in there, and you never did tie it into the rest. It looks like you just submitted a chapter from a different story. When we get to part three, you're referring back to things in two that never happened.
This needs an editor. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
aweta69
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Mar 10, 2009 |
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Nice start, Looking forward to her "comfort" till noon. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Mar 6, 2009 |
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I strongly suggest that in the future, DarkWatch waits until he/she has a little more to add.
What's been posted is above par, as far as writing skill goes, but it can hardly be called a story.
Okay, so it's an introduction of some sorts (I hope). As such, it stands. But only when/if content will be added. I will keep an eye on "Left Alone" and raise my rating when content would/should be added.
In any case, DarkWatch seems to be an author to watch. In the dark or otherwise.
JJ (7/10)
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