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Weighed
Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
(Edit) |
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Oct 7, 2010 |
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Although this is the kind of story which subject has my buttons throwing themselves at the screen in order to be pushed as frequent as possible, I felt that the writing was a bit of a letdown.
Too many accidented sentences combined with rather poor descriptions intersperced with great, erotic content, make for an uneven story.
A bit the same as for Owned's original.
In fact, the first three chapters are simply a repost as they originally were, including mistakes and everything.
The added content doesn't really make me more happy either. On the contrary.
As a rewrite, this is rather poor. certainly considering the room the story had for improvement...
JJ (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Silversea
(Edit) |
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Jun 17, 2010 |
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I thought it was a good rewrite, and honestly would love to rp this out. (8/10)
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