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The Whore-for-a-Day Game
Author: Ashley Zacharias
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(Added on Feb 26, 2010)
(This month 28760 readers) (Total 63665 readers) |
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A wife with a penchant for playing games, designs a special role-playing game to breathe new life into her marriage. She will pay a severe penalty if she loses. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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polle
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Jan 1, 2011 |
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This is bad in a good way :) (10/10)
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Curtis
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Dec 24, 2010 |
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No idea why this story says '0 kb', but that might dissuade a few casual browsers, and that would be a shame. From a sheer sex standpoint, this story is Ashley's best. She also manages to mix in her 'punished wife' theme from "INR" et al without it being as fearsome as in her previous efforts. This story also didn't suffer from its length, as a couple of her previous posting seemed to (most of her offerings settling in the 80-120 kb novella range).
Frighteningly, she actually seems to be getting better at this. (10/10)
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John Tagliaferro
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Dec 16, 2010 |
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As with everything by Ashley, this story is very well written. I just did not get into the story, at no fault of the author. I like the logic she uses and how she keeps the plot consistent. (10/10)
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ElectricBadger
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Jun 3, 2010 |
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Very well written, and thank you again for sharing!
There are a couple issues of description and pacing, but the only thing that really disappointed me was the singular focus on a character that wasn't the POV. The male lead is...frankly, kinda boring. He's unimaginative, unaggressive, and uninspiring. It's Beauty and the Putz, and he detracts from the drama.
I liked the car trip, but it's symptomatic of his lack of will and dimensionality that he can't come up with his own ideas. It's the girl who's imaginative, who's enduring the intense and interesting feelings, who is clearly the one you identify with and the main character of the sotry, and her take is completely ignored. The POV feels very backwards. I'd love to see a more developed, engaged male/secondary role in your next story :) (9/10)
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PinkBunny
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Apr 3, 2010 |
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One of the best stories I have read in a long time (10/10)
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Escritor
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Mar 13, 2010 |
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I think the rating says it all. Brilliant. I'd love to read some more, and find out about new games Leslie comes up with :) (10/10)
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GordonCK
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Mar 12, 2010 |
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One of the stories you start to read... and cant stop till the last word :o) Love it... ok, maybe I would wish for more detailed descriptions of the punishments... but only can repeat: I love it and would like to read more :o) (10/10)
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jazzfan
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Mar 5, 2010 |
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One of the better stories i've read here, with no serious misspellings, a good story, and plenty of variety. A minor complaint is an issue of style; short paragraphs add energy and momentum to a story, but without more visual separation, they tend to blur into a run-on stream of consciousness that detracts from clarity. Another nitpick is that you never clarify what the Whore was doing in the Mariott with her other customers. That could have been very interesting! But keep up the good work! (9/10)
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Ashley Zacharias
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2010)
- The Whore's logic was that The John would find her more desirable if he saw her as an object of lust by a whole room full of other men. She slipped the bartender a twenty and asked him to pass on the message that she was taking a different man up to her room every fifteen minutes; the message to be delivered as soon as she left the room. For twenty bucks, a bartender will pass on almost any message, even a false one.
Then she picked a nice looking man, started a conversation with him and told him that she was concerned about one of the other men in the room hassling her and asked him to escort her onto the elevator. She made it clear to him that she was not asking for anything more than a pretense that would end as soon as they got on the elevator. Thus, she gave The John the impression that she was the busiest hooker in the city while adhering to the rule that he was her only client.
I spent some time thinking about how to slip that information into the story and could not think of a simple way to do it. It was something that Leslie would only tell Alex after the game was over; and only if he asked. Lacking a graceful way to reveal her secret, I left it as a puzzle for the reader.
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worzel
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Mar 3, 2010 |
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Just a very, very, good read!
I would give you a twenty if I could! (10/10)
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Mist
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Mar 2, 2010 |
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Well written with a believable story line.
Good job! (10/10)
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fitzgilbert
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Mar 1, 2010 |
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tres agréable histoire. (10/10)
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fellatrix
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Mar 1, 2010 |
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Very well written and full of character. (10/10)
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DeGrinch
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Mar 1, 2010 |
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Dame woman you can write. This is the best story I've read here in a great, long time. Good character development, a plausible enough story line to make it very interesting. And great sex.
Thanks for sharing this with us. (10/10)
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