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naughty secritary
Author: shona wood
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(Added on Apr 22, 2010)
(This month 10018 readers) (Total 19368 readers) |
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women is cought in the super market by her boss dressed inapropratly he waits untill work to see if she has change....to his liking she hasnt. |
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Apr 9, 2011 |
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JimmyJump has it pretty well nailed - the grammar police need to have their way with shona wood. The story is short, but it does have a plot. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Apr 25, 2010 |
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The idea has some appeal, but the execution lacks on all sides.
The synopsys was a blatant warning that there might be 'a few' spelling/grammatical errors, along with the odd liberties taken on the syntax and punctuation front.
Too bad, as there's a certain degree of promise here.
JJ (4/10)
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- Replied by:
shony
(Edit) (Apr 26, 2010)
- im unsure of what you just wrote but will find ut layer giggles but in any case thankyou for your review and i will of course work on my stories and improve them
thank you for being honest
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Apr 27, 2010)
- Hahààà... Me neither now that I re-read it LOL...
In fact, I feel basically the same as with your other story. Should the grammar be better, the true content of the story would be more obvious, thus easier to comprehend.
But I'm pretty sure you'll do better as you go along...
JJ
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