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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
slaveatif
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Oct 10, 2010 |
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story is very good
i love to live in such world (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 8, 2010 |
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Impressive indeed. What impressed me most however, was the incoherence of it all. Pluto's Fan can write, yes, but to come-up with a story which has continuity and makes sense, seems to be a feat he isn't capable of.
Nicely written gibberish is still gibberish.
JJ (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
clara_high
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Jun 25, 2010 |
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Need to be continued... Impressive... (8/10)
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- Replied by:
PFEF
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2010)
- Thanks Clara. I agree that it needs to be continued. Have any ideas? :)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 21, 2010 |
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"(Cherie at first regretted not having brought the maids here, for she had to do the manual work of stripping and shackling this male wretch Ralph herself, but soon she delighted in her task. "Maybe having the maids do all the slave
handling isn't such a good idea after all", Julia thought.)"
1. To start with who are the maids? They have not been mentioned until this paragraph and do not get mentioned again.
2. Everywhere else the only man is called Fred so who is this Ralph and what has he done and what is his relationship to the two women?
3. Who is Julia she never appears anywhere else in this story?
4. Pam has "three children, two boys aged 8 and 9 and one slave aged 7". Next we learn that Pam has a daughter called Hannah who has been abused by her older brothers. So is Hannah the seven year old slave? Is she really a girl slave?
Basically i like the story but so many errors in a short piece of writing! i suppose i had better be careful or i might find myself in trouble with the Femina Empire.
(5/10)
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- Replied by:
PFEF
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2010)
- Thanks for your review, and sorry about the errors. I'll try to fix them.
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| Reviewer:
slave2woman
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Jun 21, 2010 |
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hope to read a lot more on the Femina Empire, even would love to become a slave in such a Female Supreme world (10/10)
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- Replied by:
PFEF
(Edit) (Jun 26, 2010)
- I recently found a Yahoo group called "FeminaEmpire". There are some other fan's fics posted there as well.
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