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Fun At the Beach
Author: Lawrence
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(Added on Oct 8, 2010)
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A dom and his slave go to the beach |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 8, 2010 |
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I still have a "pa-so" (male longyi--as opposed to the female-worn "hta-main") somewhere, neatly folded. Fond memories a-plenty...
Anyway, "Fun At The Beach" (or "An Afternoon At The Beach") is passable. Passable because of the decent writing.
The story's content however, leaves a bit to be desired, because of the lack in depth. All we've got is a string of conversations and musings --which are both well done-- but the why and whatfor are missing, restraing the story in its two-dimensional confines, while it clearly struggles to become a three-dimensional surrounding.
As such --while being a pleasant read-- the story leaves the reader, or at least myself, on his hunger.
JJ (7/10)
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