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Janet\'s Life
Author: Golffdude
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(Added on Nov 9, 2010)
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Husband gets wife to explore her sexuality... new men, bondage, prostitution |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Nov 13, 2010 |
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While the storyline and its angle are very nice, the set-up had me wondering, because at first the swapping is hubbie's idea, but Janet has no problems going along with the idea (although she at first is rather reluctant); even more so, once Janet has settled to go along with hubbie's proposal, the writing changes to such an extent that all of a sudden things come across as if it was all Janet's idea... weird.
But what bothered me the most, was the fact that the whole story is littered with wrong punctuation marks. The 'quote/unquote' marks have been switched with capital 'a' and '@' respectively, while an apostrophe has been swapped with '='... very, very annoying...
I also don't feel that Golffdude has 'nailed it', because the vocabulary used is too narrow with too many words popping-up too many times.
Good, with lots of room for improvement.
JJ (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Golffdude45-2
(Edit) (Apr 9, 2011)
- I am curious where your stories are and under what author you post your work?
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| Reviewer:
MacK
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Nov 10, 2010 |
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Totally nailed it!!!
The evolution of a committed suburban wife into a fully sexualized cuckoldrix/escort.
Excellent read. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Golffdude45-2
(Edit) (Apr 9, 2011)
- Thank you for taking the time to read my story. I apologize for the punctuation errors. My copy is not this way and I am not sure why it uploaded in this manner.
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