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Getting Out of It
Author: la_mignonne
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(Added on Dec 1, 2010)
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My little slut gets us out of trouble at the museum--but she's in for it once we get home. |
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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Dec 4, 2010 |
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Entertaining. Very readable without stretching the suspension of disbelief. Now get on with another dozen chapters or so! (9/10)
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Michael247
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Dec 3, 2010 |
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Sigh... she reminds me of Breanne...
*** Okay first of all, I think Jimmy pointed out the most fantastic part of this story: the character development and interaction. It rocks. It takes a lot of talent to create a story that feels complete without having the kind setting and costume description that I normally castigate authors for not including, but in this particular case, the two characters (who are nameless unfortunately) are so rich that had the author forced the narrator into spurious descriptions of yadda yadda, it would have detracted from his almost maniacal fascination with his slut. I know I don't say this often, but this is one of those few times when NOT adding scenic descriptions pays off. It was like a one act play, where there are no sets and the audience's attention is focused solely on the acting.
*** I did have a little trouble with the formatting. There was a sort of dialog included in the story, which I did feel helped to move the plot along, but it wasn't delineated as dialog (no quotation marks.) I realize this is a minor issue, and one that is more an author's foible than a problem, but quotation marks help to give stupid readers like me a definitive notice when someone is talking. Since several times the "narrator" also told us what he was thinking, it would have been nice to give us a clue when there was actual speech.
*** I would like to point out that not only is this story one of those rare examples of when scenic description is NOT good, but it ALSO is one of those rare examples when an author can pull off writing in present tense. Present tense hampers an author's ability to tell the story, since there is an added pressure of plot movement involved. Worse, with the story told in first person, an author handicaps themselves even more by making the "lens" in which the story is told even more restrictive - that from only one perspective. However, "Getting Out of It" is a perfect example of when a present tense story works well. I'm impressed.
*** Grammatically, the story is well written, with excellent sentence constructs and compound sentences. I appreciate good writing.
*** Lastly, I think I might be somewhat biased toward this story. The female character reminded me so much of a young lady who writes for my BDSM blog and website that I'm afraid I kept using her name in place of "her" during the story. She has almost exactly that same kind of "please do me right now I don't care what happens or why just fuck me fuck me fuck me" attitude. It just struck a chord.
*** In summary, a great story which really stretches conventional techniques and does so in an innovative way. But no matter what, it is still the character depth and dynamics that provide the umph to this incredible tale.
*** Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander (www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Dec 2, 2010 |
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After this second release by La Mignonne, I added her stories page to my bookmarks, because, damn, she's good.
Good at about everything you need to be good at when writing; she has an eye for detail without burdening the storyline with them; she knows how to put across the feelings and emotions of her characters, in sparse, to the point and oh-so enticing little sentences; and she knows how to keep a story interesting, even when there's in fact little to tell. The latter having agin to do with the way La Mignonne lets her characters act/react.
because, most of what's going on here is simply one of the laws of nature: that of action and reaction.
One of the fun things about "Getting Out Of It" is that, when finished, one has absolutely no idea where exactly things took place (even though, I saw just about now, that the synopsys says 'museum').
But that doesn't matter, in this case, as it's not about the 'where and when', not even about the 'why'. It simply 'is'.
Another particularity is that "Getting Out Of It" is a 'huit-clos' that moves locations. But that doesn't matter either, as the reader is so preoccupied with what is going on that the couple could move out to Inuit country without getting concerned over their inapropriate clothing to move so far North.
"Getting Out Of It" is a story that leans solely on the interactions between the characters, not on their wherabouts.
For such a story to succeed, the characters need to be solid, three-dimensional ones. La Mignonne succeeded with flying colors, as her characters are so rubust they almost jump from the screen.
So glad La Mignonne wasn't/isn't a one-story phenomenon.
Great.
JJ (10/10)
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