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Animal Attraction
Author: Bill Anderson
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(Added on Apr 19, 2002)
(This month 163670 readers) (Total 258420 readers) |
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Janet is kidnapped by a cruel and deranged man who lets his animals use her. A drug he gives her soon has her begging for the stimulation. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
snuffy28
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Jul 28, 2012 |
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Great plot. Good sex (10/10)
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millymooe
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Feb 5, 2008 |
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*blushingly* soaked two towels reading this.
Could feel every part of it.
xxx milly (10/10)
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DomMaster
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May 14, 2004 |
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I'd like to had a bit more drama in the opening paragraphs. This sub was way to easy to break, presenting no appreciable resistance, but not being inherently sluttly. I fould it hard to let go of my disbelief, and some of the scenarios would be midly erotic, if you're into taking sloppy seconds after a dog. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 16, 2004 |
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not into beastility for any reason, but the story was sooo hot, and good i had to over look that, hope you do much more in future, love the detail, action ect. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dee Driscoll
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Dec 19, 2003 |
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I feel a bit guilty giving the story the lowest score here, but... Honesty is the best policy as far as I am concerned. In theory, this story has it all and reading a synopsis promisses a lot. But (again)... The problem is that the story itself reads like one long synopsis.
Another story by the same author on this site that I read first showed me the skills the author has and I wished for a more fleshed-out storyline, but it's not here (this is I guess an earlier effort, OK).
To me, it's too automatic. There is nothing about the master that we learn during the course of the story. He is described as "cruel" and "deranged" in the synopsis but he feels like neither. In fact, he leaves quite the opposite impression: being reasonably considerate, despite the torture, manipulation and degradation he imposes on the slut. This probably has to do with the fact that all of this is just skimmed over in a breeze, like described events were of no great symbolical importance. I didn't feel I had the opportunity to sense the pain and humiliation the slut was experiencing. Nor did I get the chance to identify with the adrenaline flushes (or at least the cold cerebral pleasure) the master must've been having. Additionally, there is no in-sight into a broader context of who or what the master is (until the very end of the story where it feels like too little too late and actually makes for an uncomfortable change in style) which leaves him rather flat and not especially memorable. I appreciate that from a sub's viewpoint the master may be reduced to just one character feature, but as explained above, this one character feature of his (cruelty/ deranged-ness) is not utterly convincing. (Of course, seeing that certain female readers have no problems with sinking in and being deeply affected by the story probably proves my criticism to be just midly interesting theoretical chinstroking.)
The same is true and even more important even, in the case of the slut. Again, I appreciate that this is a fantasy and a little bit of stretching is necessary, yet, it really loses touch with fundamental storytelling principles to have proper impact. Namely: Janet is abducted, held prisoner, tortured, raped, disciplined and forced to have sex with animals in the first 24 hours of her incarceration. To any person I can think of, this would be a significant trauma. When I say ANY it includes submissive females prone to having sex with animals too. Yet, with Janet, we just get a couple of token afterthoughts and halfhearted self-reflections. There are no mentions of family, friends, her life, sexual experiences, no obvious fear of death or mutilation... To me, the core of any good D/s story is the way the sub is persuaded/ forced into submission: the tension, the dillema, the difficult choices. The greater the tension, shame and fear, the greater the sinful reward at the end. This is almost completely missing from this story. Janet becomes a slut way too easy, we never once hear about her previous life (except in one brief and largely insignificant episode), she has no background to speak of, so therefore her transition is not that much interesting, I didn't get the sense of give and take, of exchange, of shifting priorities. I blame a lot of this on the authors choice to use "the drug" as a handy storytelling shortcut. I don't mind that "the drug" has some apparently magical properties (constant hornyness, mind-altering, instant lubrication and muscle-relaxation, breasts enlargement etc.), it's more the way it's used as a writing crutch to sidestep some of the obvious issues that surface in every similar story. These issues result in conflicts that have to be resolved with radical actions and this makes for a good D/s story, sadly in this one "the drug" eliminates any sense of risk and as a consequence diminishes the reward.
Aside from this, the style is not bad (although better in the other story by the same author) and even the overall storyline and featured "events" are pretty solid and appealing. More work in the actual bowels of the story would have greatly improved it.
However, to reiterate, the fact it manages to turn people on obviously renders most of my comments insignificant. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
agp_millie
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Dec 2, 2003 |
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Phewww! What a lucky girl. (blush)
Thanks for an excellent, well written story and i have soaked two towels and need a Tampon for the rest of the day, thinking about her plight.
Please, any more like that?
i'll happily edit them. LOL. xxx (10/10)
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- Replied by:
banderson
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2003)
- Thank you for your kind review! Glad it "touched" you so strongly. I may write more to the story, although lately I've been concentrating on selling my works -- pen name: J.W. McKenna, writing for www.ellorascave.com and renebooks.com.
Bill
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redEva
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Jul 21, 2003 |
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delightful story! apart from minor grammar errors it is very nicely written fantasy. i loved the horse interactions (even though a bit of a stretch, it is nice to imagine). thank you :) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
banderson
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2003)
- I realize I'm late in thanking you for your nice review, Eva. I'm not sure where this story came from, but it just demanded to be written.(I'll have to go back and check my grammar again! Sometimes those things slip past me.)
Bill
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smmaster
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Oct 21, 2002 |
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A great story, just needs more and more chapters to come (10/10)
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rickirie
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Aug 7, 2002 |
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very well done (9/10)
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kaleun76
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May 16, 2002 |
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A very good story, It goes to the point, amd mantains the tension.
I hope there is more (9/10)
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sadomaster
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Apr 23, 2002 |
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one of the best stories discribing sexual lust and humiliation, waiting for more chapters (10/10)
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