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The Foreign Correspondent
Author: bigbobby.
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(Added on Mar 16, 2011)
(This month 78923 readers) (Total 103895 readers) |
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Tara a foreign correspondent in Kabul get a call to cover an uprising in Yemen. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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Rating:  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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Sep 18, 2011 |
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Sorry, but this story is so fragmented, it is almost impossible to follow. The author would do well to run it through a spell-checker as well as gramatical survey. The action is intense but repetitive and could be far more descriptive. There is no indication of Tara's feeings during the mob attack. This could be a very good plot but needs a lot of work. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Mar 21, 2011 |
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I know this is going to be a serial story, and I know I really really dislike serial stories, but I love the character Tara so much I just don't give a damn.
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Okay as usual with author bigbobby we are treated to a dialog and action intense narrative that eschews most scenic description in favor of high-powered plot movement and character development. This is the first bigbobby story I remember reading in which the main character is so fucktastic that I was really upset when I finished part one and found no part two. This was complicated by the fact that I found part one to be highly arousing and the sexual tension built up just from us wondering what depths of depravity the main character would do next, and all this PRIOR to the main story.
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Grammatically, some of the sentence structure was a little odd. For example "She was equally proud of her talent as a slut taking on several guys at one time." This isn't exactly wrong, but is "talent" referring to her being a slut, or taking on several guys at a time? There are quite a few sentences like this. Of course, I'm being picky, but they just felt a little odd.
*As I mentioned, where this story REALLY shines is in the character of Tara, a no holds barred slut. I LOVED the scene where she sat there chatting with the general while stuffed with a giant black dildo vibrator on the plane.
* The only reason I didn't give this story a higher rating is because there were very few scene descriptions, meaning that while the author described the characters (even their attitudes) and the action, the scenes themselves were left out. I also wished that part two had been included. Like a lot of "episodic" stories, this one would have been better served by having a two part "starter". Part one to introduce the characters and part two to close of the episodic plotline. That's the problem with serial stories. You have to make each "part" an enclosed tale in and of itself, so that your reader gets a sense of completion. We really didn't get that here, especially since we ended part one in the middle of a sex scene. What's up with that? I also felt that the author missed an opportunity with the "memory" scene where Tara was thinking about her life and death experience with Captain Davis. I would have loved to experience her remembering what it was like getting gangbanged in the back of an M-80 Command track while Captain Davis screwed her brains out, all while she's thinking about death and seeing that ridge line explode. Can you say perfect soundtrack?
*In summary we've got a really good story here that just for Tara's sake I'm going to wait in breathless anticipation for.
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (8/10)
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