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Steel City
Author: Morlock
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(Added on Apr 30, 2011)
(This month 22409 readers) (Total 28383 readers) |
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A career in steel working and B&D go together well - at least until the authorities get involved. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
southernbelle16
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May 30, 2011 |
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I enjoyed your story but it could have had a few more details. Thank you for sharing (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Morlock
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May 16, 2011 |
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Ok, everybody. I hear you. My only defense for the lack of erotic details is that I rewrote the story about four times trying to make it at least halfway believable. The earlier versions were so contrived that they didn't even make for a good storyline, let alone a decent erotic script. During the process, I just sort of forgot about the audience it was being written for.
Anyway, version two is well along and will have far more details about the things that happen to Cathy, June and Metalica (mostly bad - definitely painful).
Thanks for the feedback, everyone.
Morlock (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Snark
(Edit) (May 16, 2011)
- BRAVO!
We wait with great anticipation!
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| Reviewer:
Laura.Dane
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May 15, 2011 |
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Tremendously skilled writer. It's a very interesting story with some excellent plot. I would enjoy a bit more detail in the subjugation and transformation of the girl and a bit more sex. (10/10)
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Snark
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May 14, 2011 |
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Once more, a very well written, proofed and edited story form an author I enjoy reading. BUT!!!(As an aside...B U T stands for Behold the Underlying Truth!) like I have reviewed before and several on this story before me...where's the sex? Terrific imagination and story development, great technology and implementation, delicious characters and opportunities...
PLEASE! use your wonderful writing skills to describe a few sexual scenes in detail as well as you do the rest of the story. I'd love to raise the rating. Maybe next time? Or collaborate with someone. Polecat, perhaps. Something to bring out the sweat. This is great mainstream porn fiction...but too mild for the BDSM Library! Still a fun read.
the Snark (9/10)
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pollyannapax
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May 13, 2011 |
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Very well written, but not enough actual sex. Tit whipping would have been nice. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
DeGrinch
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May 11, 2011 |
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Very well done. My only complaint is that I didn't think the sex in some cases wasn't detailed enough. Thanks for sharing your story with us. (9/10)
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SamCurious
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May 5, 2011 |
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thoroughly enjoyed the tale of this scurrilous metalworker. can't wait for the next update. (9/10)
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explwr
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May 3, 2011 |
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VERY good story. Well thought out plot line. (9/10)
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