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Housewife Transformation
Author: Karen Kay
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(Added on May 30, 2011)
(This month 13749 readers) (Total 17759 readers) |
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Jim always wanted to see his lovely wife screw another man. His fantasy has always been to become a cuckold and now it's about to become true when Jim has to find a date for a black business client |
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| Reviewer:
oldebloke
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Content is great and storyline is great. I would like to see more of this story to see how you handle the later sessions between the principals. Your descriptions of the principals was very good, also!
However, grammar linguistic usage should be improved as it would increase the readability of the story. Heterographs often misused as in:
hear vs here
cheap vs cheep
bow vs bough
there vs their vs they're
waist vs waste
principle vs principal
are vs our
your vs you're
guest vs guessed
herd vs heard
message vs massage
shear vs sheer
Many writers don't use these correctly as well as misusing I versus me and .... That one is easy, try it without the "and ..." and see if it sounds right. (5/10)
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