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Happy Birthday Angie
Author: Daze_Earth
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(Added on Dec 11, 2011)
(This month 24474 readers) (Total 39466 readers) |
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Angela's birthday party goes horribly wrong despite her meticulous, yet poor planning. No one turns up for the party except Nikki and Tamara who weren't originally on the guest list. The two beautiful and mischievous sisters take control of Angela and soon the birthday girl finds herself stripped down to her birthday suit. The sisters invite their friends over and the party kicks off. Having fun at Angela's expense becomes the name of the game as the girls tease, humiliate and finally fuck the unhappy birthday girl. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
VeniVidi
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Jan 28, 2012 |
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This is well written and certainly sexy enough to excite. I agree with others that there could have been more byplay between the two antagonists. As a first story attempt it is very good indeed. Thank you. (8/10)
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Martiniman
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Jan 2, 2012 |
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A very good story! I rate stories on entertainment value & this has it. Let's not forget why we are reading these stories...and that's to be entertained. If I have any criticism, it's that the story ended to quickly. It could have played out better during the sex & what emotions were in play. Also could have had more about Tamara & Angie & maybe the beginning of a D/s relationship which would have given birth to a new story. (9/10)
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Michael247
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Dec 23, 2011 |
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I've written a review for this story on my blog "Michael Alexander's BDSM Review". To be honest, I agree with several of the other reviewers, but I felt the positives to this story far outweighed the negatives. You can read the review at:
http://michaelalexandersbdsmreview.blogspot.com/2011/12/happy-birthday-angie-by-daze-earth-just.html
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Yours Faithfully, Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com) (7/10)
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JimmyJump
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Dec 20, 2011 |
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Winds seldom drift across hallways, except when someone has been having a copious English breakfast or the hallway has its own weather system. Or your name is Arthur and your summer cottage is called Camelot, of course.
Drafts, on the other hand, have been known to make their way across halls and various other dwellings around a house.
I also must agree with Curtis in that the start of "Happy Birthday, Angie" is rather shaky, mainly because Daze Earth wants to explain too many things that don't need explaining -throwing in some stilted dialogue to boot.
As of chapter two, things settle a tad, but still (to me) everything comes across as a touch forced and too much as wishful thinking from the author.
Late teens/early twens acting like pre-teens and the main character is a predestined doormat who watched too many Borg episodes from "Star Trek, The Next Generation" and thus thinks resistance is futile...
Writing is okay, story is not.
JJ (6/10)
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- Replied by:
himannv
(Edit) (Dec 20, 2011)
- Thank you for taking the time to review this. I'm looking to write some more and appreciate the feedback you've provided. I'll try and address a few of the points you bring up in the next one, so hopefully it would be an improvement. Cheers.
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| Reviewer:
DomOrSub
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Dec 19, 2011 |
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I agree with Curtis that the begining was a little slow but things defiantly picked up once the group arrived. There were some very imaginative humiliation idea's you dropped in, the face in the cake and final desperate escape from dildo welding girls were both very original and a big turn on. I was sad to see you haven't published anything else, please keep writing this was great work. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
himannv
(Edit) (Dec 19, 2011)
- Thank you for the review, the feedback is much appreciated. I'm working on the next one as we speak and hoping it comes out out well. Cheers.
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Dec 14, 2011 |
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I started out not liking this at all, but the longer I stuck with it, the better it became. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
himannv
(Edit) (Dec 14, 2011)
- Thanks for the review and the comment. Working on more stories right now so feedback is much appreciated.
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