|
|
|
|
|
Enslaved by His Family
Author: cuyabro
|
| |
(Added on May 21, 2002)
(This month 23140 readers) (Total 50532 readers) |
| |
Young man's family creates a plot to fake his death in order to kidnap, bound, enslave, and torture him for the rest of his life. |
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 9 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 44% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
22% |
0% |
33% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (4/10) |
| Average
Rating: (4/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (7/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (1/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
oldboy
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 11, 2005 |
| |
Had an interesting start, that caused me to want to read it. However, it was rather unbeliveable that all of his family would want to do this. The tortures were a bit unimaginative, and why is everyone doing the same thing? Good first try, if that is what it was. I would have liked a more plausible, reason to do this to the boy. Just a few people involved. Let him not know what all of their plans are for him. Actually discribe the acts as they happen, and put a little more feeling into it. Space out the the acts and have it go on for awhile. Like I said, the idea was creative, would like to see another attempt, I do like this type of fantasy. (5/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Mar 28, 2005 |
| |
good start, where to from here if anywhere (7/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
pet10
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Oct 11, 2004 |
| |
It is an unacceptable story. Is this family a bedlam? (1/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
tyjord
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Mar 4, 2004 |
| |
A great story idea with tremendous potential. There is so much more that could have been done with this. A slower, more in depth pace, with more mystery as to the plans of the family could have improved it greatly. Keep in mind also, that willing suspension of disbelief only goes so far. The extreme repeated physical abuse is unnecessary to the story. The author should not indulge so heavily in their prefered kink that it ruins the story. I'm sorry to see no further work by this author. More paractice and the help of an editior might be what is needed to take them to the next level. (5/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
simon
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jan 30, 2004 |
| |
Very good ideas need developing in further parts
also some idea as to "Why."
I think the clinical writing stryle fits! (7/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
ladys_maid
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 19, 2003 |
| |
This is just dreadful writing. What started out as basically an interesting idea is simply trashed by really poor writing skills and pointless repetition. An enormous disappointment. (1/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
menteroso
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Sep 1, 2002 |
| |
The writing style was so clinical and emotionless as to make this unreadable. (1/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
hyphen666
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 23, 2002 |
| |
What more could the masochist reader desire? How about a plot, some characters, a proofreader, and something that at least verges on reality? Is that asking for too much? I don't think so; this is dreadful in the extreme. (1/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
maganlal
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 23, 2002 |
| |
excellent start....pls continue n add more of female-domination.....let those 8 take the charge.....it will be nice if we some action from his girlfrien n brother's fiancee.....severe whipping will do the trick (7/10)
|
|
|
About 