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Man and Wife
Author: Ceight
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(Added on May 13, 2012)
(This month 76057 readers) (Total 114761 readers) |
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A man realizes his wife is submissive and in rushing to take advantage of it finds how dominating he really is. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Jorgy444
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Sep 10, 2012 |
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You really have a weird streak in you, that
is comical and erotic, sadistic and campy.
Needs more story and character development,
seems to go too fast and erratic. Proofreading
and grammar would give it more polish.
Thanks for the story! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Ceight
(Edit) (Sep 10, 2012)
- Oh geez. I just went back and started to re-read and saw what a mess it was. Thanks!
- Replied by:
Ceight
(Edit) (Sep 10, 2012)
- So I updated it, fixing a number of silly mistakes. I appreciate your review. I didn't fix any of the pacing and I kind of doubt that I'll ever make such considerations when doing this kind of writing, but who knows? Maybe it will be in the back of my mind now.
Also upon re-reading there were a bunch of little moments that made me laugh out loud. I remembered it being funny, but not that funny.
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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May 19, 2012 |
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Okay, good, worth reading, whatever. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
robertahunt
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May 14, 2012 |
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Really enjoyed the dufus protagonist! Thanks. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Ceight
(Edit) (May 15, 2012)
- I'm glad he was appreciated! I thought he was pretty funny myself.
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