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Chelsea Gets Cuntrolled
Author: CumpleteCuntrol
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(Added on May 27, 2012)
(This month 21594 readers) (Total 49998 readers) |
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Chelsea, who just turned 18, celebrated the day after her birthday by getting expelled from school. Her dad is fed up with her horribly self-destructive attitude and takes steps to teach her to behave like a good girl. This is the chronicle of her transformation. |
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| Reviewer:
grinner666
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Jun 2, 2012 |
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I'm a big fan of mind control tales, particularly when they end with actual sex (not all do). This one was especially hot. The only criticism I would make is that Chelsea's complete conversion seems a bit ... rushed. Still, an excellent story. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Cumplete Cuntrol
(Edit) (Jun 2, 2012)
- Thank you for the review. I may go back and break out the part after the Philosophy, etc. and slow the story down more.
- Replied by:
grinner666
(Edit) (Jun 6, 2012)
- Nah. I would suggest you simply remember that for your next story. At this point, I want to see what happens NEXT, not read a retelling of what's already gone on.
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In other words: MOAR!!
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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May 30, 2012 |
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Nice story, well written, with great musings and dialogue/conversations.
I feel it must have been a while since the Major went over some texts written by Willie, because there's nothing here which reminds me of ye ol' Shakespeare. Secondly, the Major has been around the library long enough to realize that those "square speech marks" (quotation marks where I come from) have to do with the website's code not accepting certain formats/formatting.
Anyway, for all its merits, I also feel that "Chelsea Gets Cuntrolled" (Cunt-rolled?) lacks in passion from the author.
Like I said, the writing is abover par, as is the use of the language; but everything feels like the author was on autopilot while writing and forewent caring for his/her characters, which results in a story that comes across as static and cold.
CompleteCuntrol shows promise as a writer, though. Just enrich your characters with emotions.
JJ
(9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Major Littmann
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May 30, 2012 |
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CumpleteCuntrol makes rather heavy weather of what could have been a cracking tale, too much preamble, those ridiculous square speech marks and positively Shakesearean speeches, do people really speak like that? they don't in Bond movies or where I come but from a bad start it did sparkle briefly before getting steadily worse,
But definitey worth reading, (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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May 30, 2012 |
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I really enjoyed the mystery & sexual control in this story, as well as the mind control. I'm hoping there is more to this story & it's posted soon. (10/10)
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